Raynelle Winters//Daughter Of Dionysus(DONE)

[raynellewinters]

ready to fight, a knife held close by your side

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Raynelle Jane Winters

broken mirror, a million shades of light

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Name::Raynelle Jane Winters
Nickname::Raynelle
Age::14
Gender::Female

we can run to the end of the world

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Species::Demi-God
Olympian Parent::Dionysus
Years at Camp::Three
Claimed::Yes

the songs of the season are her only crown

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Celebrity Claim:Miranda Cosgrove
Looks::Dark brown hair and near black eyes.Her clothes are usually a wide verity of colors and style.Raynelle has a bit of a tired atmosphere around her.She usually smiles at people she likes despite her mood.Raynelle has fairly dark circles under her eyes,but are hard to see.
Personality::
She fun,random,and has a great passion for drinks.Raynelle is easy to talk to and a lot of fun to be around.The biggest thing you want know about her is her passion for strong drinks,no underage drinking.Two things not to do around her is one,insult Dionysus,and two,be an idiot.Raynelle may be a child of Dionysus,but she can fight.

If your not an enemy,she'll be polite,but if your a close friend,she'll be alot of fun to be around if you break that quiet shell in the beginning.Also,Raynelle will protect you with her very life if she cares about you.Her ambition is to be a hero.At the moment,Raynelle is focused on that dream.
Family::Dionysus,Ella Winters
History::Her mother is Ella Winters,her and Dionysus fell in love at a party,and later Raynelle was conceived.Ella never saw Dionysus more then twice after.Ella,being eighteen at the time,did her best to care for the child,but it was never very good.Raynelle grew up with little privileges and was always thankful when she received something.At mortal school,Raynelle was the one sitting alone reading a book or doing homework instead of talking or laughing.Once Raynelle went to camp she decided to stay year-round,so her mother could do whatever she wanted with her life.Dionysus reasons for not claiming her until later are currently unknown.

The very year she fought in the Battle For Olympus,doing what she could with so little training,mostly tending to hurt heroes.Unluckily enough,her mother was killed in the battle while all the mortals were asleep.The rest of the year all she did was sulk.Dionysus did his best to console her but it didn't work.In the end Raynelle decided that her mother would want her to move on and did what she could.At the moment she's working to her dream of being a real hero.

broken sword and shield and tears that never fall

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Name/Nickname::Rachel
Roleplaying Experience::Three years.
Sample RP::
(This is from a different site,on this one Raynelle is a daughter of Hermes.)
This had to be one of her worse days.

Raynelle Winters glared at the ambulance driving next to her.It was idiotic really,what she was mad at.See the ambulance next to had the symbol of Hermes,a Caduceus,on the side of the vehicle was incorrect.It only had one snake wrapped around it,instead of the correct two snakes.

She didn't know why it bothered her so much,she figured it was because she was a Greek Mythology freak and she was already in a bad mood. Raynelle got caught for one of those rare,and annoying days she got caught stealing something.This time,it was a loaf of bread and some guy's wallet.I mean really?She needed it more then they did.Now she was on her way to the police station in a cop car now.That's not all,this cop was weird!

To explain why that is,here is some examples.A week ago,the very same guy saw her,and Raynelle knows he saw her,take some food from the bakery and didn't do a thing but look like she just confirmed some suspicion he had.As well,just now,she could've sworn when he saw he glaring at the incorrect Caduceus he had a bit of a smile tugging at his lips.She nearly shook her head,this guy had to be a psycho!

The car nearly jerked to a stop.If not for her seat belt,she might have flown out the window.After she caught her breath,she looked out the window,and her eyes widened in awe.This was definitely not a police station,but...it looked like an academy!Before her brain could process what she might be here for,the supposed 'cop' said "Come with me,the principal with explain."Raynelle blinked slowly and figured it best to get out,once she did,the cop car turned into a bus!That's not all the kids around were doing things like sword fighting and archery.Raynelle looked at the cop and nearly had a heart attack,he had hundreds of eyes!He motioned for her to follow him.

Yeah,this was going to be a bad day.

[Ψ ADMIN SUSHI Ψ]

I’m sorry to inform you but your application has been

DENIED

Do not worry though, below are the glitches found in your applications. With the right time and dedication they can be fixed.

First: You did not fill out the application fully and properly. Where it says FULL NAME, you should type your characters full name.

Second: By simply saying “check my picture’ will not cut it for looks. If that was all we wanted we would not have added that part of the application. That part needs to be filled out.

Third:Your personality is too short. There should be at least one more paragraph. The second one you have is only two sentences and does not count as a stand on its own paragraph. Also on the topic of personality, your character is listed as 14 and yet you claim she gets drunk. Supporting underage drinking, fiction or not, is something I will not do. I highly doubt at age 14 is she such a lush even if she were a daughter of Dionysus. Your personality really lacks who your character is. You list a few traits and then talk about her taste for wine.

Fourth: Your history is tremendously too short. You have, at best, one paragraph. Again two sentences do not stand alone as their own paragraph. I will not count it. You have absolutely nothing about Raynelle as she grew up. You have one sentence about Raynelle meeting Dionysus and then two more that talk about the Battle of Manhattan. Frankly, you did not write a history. Also to comply with the canon, Dionysus only had two children (claimed) while Percy was at camp. In the last two years he would have claimed others. So while Raynelle may have been at camp three years she probably only would have known her father was Dionysus for two years. It states on the application that you must have AT LEAST 3 paragraphs for the history.

Fifth: Your celebrity claim would be fine if your character was not 14. I can see Avril pulling off 17 or above but nothing really below 17.

This site is an intermediate to advanced roleplaying site. I am concerned that the requirements on a site this level may be a strain. This is not meant to be offensive, merely looking out for your sake for the future as this will make threads difficult as the site operates at an intermediate to advanced level.

Here are a few examples of the average character bio/application that have been accepted in the past.

Avery Reynolds

Rion Angelo

Hayden Pratt


If you have any questions, comments or concerns please contact myself or Annabeth.

Thank you.

--Admin Percy

[raynellewinters]

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[Annabeth Chase]

I regret to inform you that your application has been

DENIED

Following are the glitches still remaining in the application:

First: In her personality, it is mentioned she enjoys strong drinks, though then goes on to say ‘no underage drinking.’ This seems to counter itself, as strong drinks more often than not refers to alcoholic drinks.

Second: The history is still too short. Three paragraphs are required. And in ordered to be considered a full paragraph, roughly seven (7) sentences are required.

-- Annabeth, Moderator